Choose the best turns, shrugs, and leaning from the Body Movements chapter of Kent and Shelton's The Romance Writer's Phrase Book

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"His gaze was riveted on her face, then moved over her body slowly" - I don't know about your workmanship quality, but I expect that when something is riveted, it doesn't move, slowly or otherwise!

Soft gazes, drillbit gazes that bore into you, riveting you like plate metal... what else do gazes do?

This is such a goldmine.

"he scanned her critically and beamed approval"

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He was so disturbing to her in every way. Hahahaha

Automatic thread bump. This poll's results are now in.

I have given these some thought, and I am going with she stopped suddenly and slowly turned in a circle because there may be some demonic possession or witchcraft involved, or at the very least something other than stumbling or being impatient.

― league of women voters, Tuesday, 27 December 2011 22:07 (5 days ago) Permalink

will anyone vote for he gave an impatient shrug? seems kinda lazy and barely distinguishable from he shrugged dismissively

― league of women voters, Tuesday, 27 December 2011 22:12 (5 days ago)

i guess we could have stopped right here

WINNER
A: NO

his gaze fell to the creamy expanse of her neck
creamy and clotted
like sour milk risen to the top
of a bulging glass
with fat thighs

there was a tingling in the pit of her stomach
deeper, too
her intestines
oh shit
the intestinal parisites were rebelling

he gave her body a raking glance
a shoveling grimace
and a chainsawing slap across the ass

something intense flared through his enchantment

hemorrhoids.